Sunday, October 17, 2010

Promises or Threats

you set my heart on fire
your touch a magnet
of  love;
once

now 
inflamed thoughts
scalded by infused words
are a far cry from love's touch

bitter anger at heart's words thrown away
leave oceanic tears dried up 
flagrantly used up
 years ago

eyes
full of malice
afraid of what they see
cling to anger at today's failings

no more talk of love's bosom
Promises or Threats
harsh; is that it
or not
?

11 comments:

  1. i like the form...and it brings many a question to mind...love or relationships can get quite messy over time....

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  2. Hmmm. This sort of reminds me of someone...but I can't quite put my finger on who... ;)

    (Yeah yeah...always with a smartass remark, right?)

    In seriousness - Thank You. For this, and for everything. And extra special thanks for your email tonight. I'll write you back tomorrow, when I can put more than two words together with any sort of sense.

    xo

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  3. Love can be such a messy messy thing. We open our hearts and take a chance...and never know for sure what the future holds.

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  4. When I first saw the title, Ithought I'd gone to Is it a promise or a threat? blog! Love the form of this one.

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  5. i love how you shaped this poem - it's like the words would flow from one drop to the next - really beautiful

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  6. ..oh - and i like your new profile pic

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  7. * too true Talon. I am an optimist, but sometimes you hit that line of when is enough, enough? I offer strength to all facing those horrible big questions

    * thanks Suzi. interesting coincidence

    * thanks Claudia. I tried to maintain the shape and I think it adds to the piece.

    The pic is from last Autumn, but I really loved it and thought it was season appropriate.

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  8. love the physical symmetry of the form & the strong anger of the words. v.cool!

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